Monday, February 10, 2020

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Nathaniel Vo Portfolio

A Story Portfolio


  1. Hi Nathaniel,
    I enjoyed reading your story! I too thought that Rama passing the tests to win over the respect of the king and his wife, Sita, was an extremely important part of the Ramayana. The modern interpretation that your story brings is definitely accurate! Tests and exams run a lot of our lives as students, and the stress they bring is more than real. They take a huge amount of time, thought, planning, and preparation. I am currently studying for the FE exam to become a professional engineer and am putting in a lot of hours. I like the dialogue you have in your story. It adds a personal element between Peter and his professor. It's not too overwhelming either. I'm a sucker for happy endings, and I liked how you gave one but incorporated a cliff hanger delivery. The only thing I would suggest is to add more vivid detail in his second make-up test as you did in the first exam. Great work!

  2. Hi Nathaniel,
    Wow!!! This is such an amazing story. Reading these storybooks always gets my head thinking over what story this could be, but this one had me scratching my head. I do agree with you about this story being kind of the turning point of Ramayana because if he did not go and break the bow, he would never have met Sita. They would not have gone through all of their troubles if this didn't have happened. I like the kind of small voice that resonates through the story. Kinda creepy, but cute. Right now, the page looks kind of jumbled with so many words. You could move the author's note to the very bottom and put the picture in the middle to really split the work up. I would like to see a little more detail about the second story. Give me some emotions! I like the ending, but it seems kind of abrupt.
    I am ready to read more!